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Oct 21, 2012
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Fire
Why do I want you so damn bad?
You really make me squirm.
My innards rip apart in fire.
With just a single look from you,
My soul is set to burn.
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
judyanne
12 years 8 months ago
great iambic
and the tetrameter/trimeter mix works great - especially the extra tetrameter..
is this a particular form? tell me if you know the name of it - or is it one you thought up? lol in which case we'll have to name it 'the rhiannon'...
good write - the meter helps in making the pace of urgency the words convey
love judy
xxx
Rhiannon1010
12 years 8 months ago
This form came purely from my
This form came purely from my soul. Lol
introvert
12 years 8 months ago
Hi, there
Its like you saw my heart and wrote this. I love it.
Rhiannon1010
12 years 8 months ago
I'm glad you like it.
I'm glad you like it.
Rhiannon1010
12 years 8 months ago
This is honestly my first
This is honestly my first real attempt at any meter. I tried it because I'm starting a workshop soon on meter.
Esker
12 years 8 months ago
Im looking at Meter in a whole new light
Maybe that glow!!
poetic passion!!
excellent!