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Holly berries profuse on branches above
thick in clusters red against green
ornaments on an early Christmas wreath
or medals decorating a chest in the military
One spike in particular is especially festooned
near the top, standing out
high unlike me
all cynics’ evidence to the contrary
As the fire smolders it remains amazing to me
to see a massive pile of branches, limbs and leaves
turned into heat, smoke
and a relatively small pile of ash
Ash for compost, fertilizer, keeping away slugs
ash turned into soap, for melting ice, absorbing odors
how perfect is that
all from a spark and yard debris, cleanup on Isle Whidbey
Waste not, want not as the saying goes
make use of all the things you receive
it’s as if it is all part of a formula, destined to be
some grand plan of a hidden hand
About This Poem
Last Few Words: This arrived the other day when a break in our Whidbey Island weather, with little wind, offered the chance to recycle some of what the trees drop as fall steams toward winter.
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
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8 months 2 weeks ago
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Lavender
8 months 2 weeks ago
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Hello, Richard,
It is mesmerizing to watch a fire as all turns to ash. Beautiful thoughts, especially in the final couple lines. I enjoyed this!
Thank you!
L
Richard Milne
8 months 2 weeks ago
Thank you Lavender
It's always great to get feedback. Bless you in all you do.
Candlewitch
8 months 2 weeks ago
Dear Richard,
a lovely poem for this contest. Good luck! my favorite lines are:
As the fire smolders it remains amazing to me
to see a massive pile of branches, limbs and leaves
turned into heat, smoke
and a relatively small pile of ash
It is very nice to meet you!
hugs, Cat
Richard Milne
8 months 2 weeks ago
Cat: Nice to meet you as well...
...and thanks for taking the time to read, Keep writing; I particularly enjoyed Wood-Smoke, and thought initially the hyphen was not needed in the title, but then realized it's a subtle nod to the adjective in the final stanza. Bravo!
Candlewitch
8 months 2 weeks ago
Dear Richard,
Thank you so very much!
hugs, Cat