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Oct 12, 2013
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First attempt at Dactylic - bottom line workshop
Beautiful, bountiful, beleaguered princesses,
tortured and tormented, exhibit tolerance.
Patiently, presenting amazing fortitude.
Constantly forgiving horrible attitudes.
Beau..ti..ful / boun..ti..ful, / bel..eagu..ered / prin..cess.es,
tor..tured and / tor..ment..ed, / ex..hib..it / tol..er..ance.
Pa..tient..ly / pre..sent..ing / am..a..zing / for..ti..tude.
Con..stant..ly / for..giv..ing / horr..i..ble / att..i..tudes.
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
11 years 11 months ago
can you use the advanced format?
using the boldface would be easier to show how you are scanning your quatrain dear Mand
mand
11 years 11 months ago
Hi Rula
Been trying, but not having much success. I manage to embolden the stressed words, using control B, but when I try to save it goes badly out of line. I suspect I'm doing something wrong. All part of the learning process I guess. It's o.k I managed it!
Rula
11 years 11 months ago
This is how I scan this dear Mand
first line
Bea-uti-ful|, boun-ti-ful,| be-lea-guered |prin-cess- es ,(prin-CESS-es)
Second line
tor-tured and| tor-ment-ed,| ex-hi-bit| to-le- rance .(to-LE-rence)
third line
Pa-tient-ly|, pre-sen-ting| ama-z-ing |for-tit-ude.
fourth line
Con-stan-tly |for-gi-ving |ho-rri-ble |a-tti-tudes
Rula
11 years 11 months ago
the advanced formating
the advanced formating sometimes goes mad and refuse to remove the format. I used to CAPITAL for the accented and the small for non-accented.