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Jan 27, 2025
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A FLICKER OF LIGHT
Can I see a flicker of light here?
I had seen a gloomy dark cloud
Walking in the passage of time.
If I could see cloud filaments,
I shall be resonated with a new hope.
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neopoet
4 months 4 weeks ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The imagery in your poem is evocative, creating a contrast between darkness and light. The concept of seeking a flicker of light amidst gloom is powerful and relatable. Consider expanding on the emotions evoked by the darkness and the potential transformation brought by the light. Additionally, refining the structure and flow of the poem could enhance its impact on the reader.
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Rula
4 months 4 weeks ago
Hello Jackweb
A nice piece of hope.
I can read it clearly between the lines.
Very well said.
Hope to see and read more of that!
Jackweb
4 months 3 weeks ago
Thank
You so much for stopping by.
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Lavender
4 months 3 weeks ago
A Flicker Of Light
Hello, Jackweb,
Yes, even the smallest bit of hope makes a difference. This is a lovely piece to take both literally and spiritually.
Thank you!
L