Fool Circle

Works for me.

~A

This one hits home for me right now - dreams that I wish could come true but would probably panic like a school girl if they did, lol, 6 of one half a dozen of another. Very good write.

I don't think we ever truly know what the future holds, but I was once told, it is just so much better to say "Gee, I wish I hadn't than Gee, I wish I had."

We never know until we take that chance. If not this time, then perhaps the next. But, each step we take toward enlightenment or love has a way of making the next step that much easier.

You ask a question many have asked throughout life. You will touch your reader with this subject because just about everyone can relate.

As far as technicality goes, I think this a bit wordy for free-verse poetry. It verges on prose cut up to look like poetry. You might practice a bit more brevity in this work.

An example might be:

"raw fear
obscures

future tears blur vision
cloud windows

as myriads of jarred doors
daunt inner passion"

Just a thought.
All in all, your message is clear.
Thank you for the opportunity to absorb your words. ~Pamela