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Forewarning

Forewarning

Shadowed talons reaching for the basement
trapped by pale politicos above
southern culture lost to cold indifference
strangles the hypocrisy of love

clinging to society is fruitless
when savagery’s accepted as the norm
black and white are shades completely empty
and little children grow to fit the form

power is the currency of freedom
apathy the scourge of those who wait
wandering a city with no mercy
praying for a miracle too late

nothing is more powerful than passion
motivated by the need for pride
belief that all humanity’s a rainbow
must evolve from something deep inside

struggling for what most take for granted
is not a way for anyone to live
poverty itself has no true color
when demographics dictate what we give

to truly understand the human problem
we must begin to realize the need
and ignoring what our souls are made of
will only cause us all to sorely bleed

C. Lon R. Bruso

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New England, originally, now, Macon, N.C., USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, Bob Dylan

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Comments

Seren

Seren

11 years 4 months ago

Lonnie

Wow, there are some thoughts in this one that touch on the profound that last stanza is outstanding I cant give you anything but a Bravo...Wonderful poem my friend

I thoroughly enjoyed the read

love to you both Jayne x

L

Lonnie

10 years 10 months ago

Thank you, Jayne!

If it pleased you, I am happy! Thank you for taking the time to read this and leave me nice feedback!

Ian.T

Ian.T

11 years 4 months ago

Lonnie

Loved this write full of real reasons not to love political space polluters.
One day you will astound me and write of the love you have for those around you, meanwhile take care and know we think of you and you know we thank you for all you have done.
Yours Ian.T

L

Lonnie

10 years 10 months ago

Thanks, Ian!

Writing of love is difficult for me as I am not sufficiently aware of how it works! Perhaps with a few more years of life with Chrys that may change! Thanks for reading!

R

raj

11 years 4 months ago

Lonnie

I was wondering why you haven't been posting lately....i have always looked forward to read them and each time I do it creates for me an image of a writer who is sensitive and connects with burning issues riddling our world....I loved this one too...

Regards,

L

Lonnie

10 years 10 months ago

Thanks raj,

Well, I'm back at it again, so hang on and enjoy the ride, my friend! LOL!!

China Blue

China Blue

11 years 4 months ago

Mr. B

you have some loyal followers here
I like Ian's suggestion

L

Lonnie

10 years 10 months ago

Thank you, Dear!

I will try and comply as soon as I am able! Thanks for stopping by!

alidzain

alidzain

10 years 10 months ago

Hi Lonnie,

Loved this piece. Gonna check on your other works too. This is a powerful piece.

I object! I object!
why do we have scums as leaders
did their voters lack in intellect
or are they blind boot kissers?

when the heart is laden with greed,
it's blacker than charcoal.
Corruption will have its seeds
growing ten times fold!

While the poor become invisible
as the wealthy swagger and boast,
thinking they own the world
while others fade as ghost

Alid