Neopoem Of The Week Contest May 22 to May 28

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Forté

Yesterday rolled slowly,
Like the tired legs of a pregnant mother,
Pushing on, just enough to hold survival
It's strength to go on, languishing persevere
Forté clings-clutches willing's mind
To see tomorrow's bogus in view,
Brings peaceful assurance
Then with a sigh from beneath,
'All will be fine'... urging on consciousness
Steps out to birth future's great.

@sheddie

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Nigeria, NGA

Favorite Poets: Niyi osunadare, William Morris, Alfred lord Tennyson, William Blake, William Shakespeare, John Milton and many more

Comments

Candlewitch

3 years 1 month ago

hello,

in the first line: Yesterday (rolled) slowly, try: (trudged or lumbered) pregnant women don't roll.
keep working on it. say the lines out loud and it will help.

*hugs, Cat

Sheddie

3 years ago

Thanks a lot ❤️

Geezer

3 years ago

I don't see...

that the title, Forte' has much to do with the theme. Forte' meaning strong point or strength.
To see tomorrow's bogus in view? The word bogus means fake, untrue or lies. I not sure how that brings
peaceful assurance. I think you should look up these words and those that you are unfamiliar with. ~ Geezer.
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