Frenzy

the sky inverts into a blue lagoon
as we elope in zero gravity
levitating in a bubble all our own
only madness can create
steering it with our bodies squirming
limbs thrashing, passions soaring

suddenly as the bubble bursts
we dive in the blue lagoon with a big splash
with stars in your eyes
glowing in the aftermath
of our madness and buoyant frenzy
snowballing into ecstasy

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

Comments

tyro

7 years 2 months ago

Well no doubt about it, that

Well no doubt about it, that was definitely a frenzy. Still trying to get my imagination to calm down.

raj

7 years 2 months ago

thanks for taking time to read and comment. Your comment indicates that you found the poem effective. I hope you are now back from the imagination zone...:)
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gregwa8

7 years 2 months ago

nice little surreal journey

nice little surreal journey you took us on! I like how the lagoon, inverts into the sky, and then the character splashes into the lagoon, which is actually the sky, and so their eyes become the stars. the internal logic, though the poem is absurd, makes a lot of sense. creates a very vivid picture. thanks for this!

raj

7 years 2 months ago

greg

i liked the way you summed up this poem as "nice little surreal journey". Thanks a lot for the read and your elaborate comment. Good to know it also created a vivid picture for you...
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Rula

7 years 2 months ago

How I always

wished to let my imagination travel so far. Seems my senses prefer reality much better. I envy you my friend.
That was fun to read indeed raj and a v. apt title too.

raj

7 years 2 months ago

Thanks Rula

for the read and comment....i know your "envy" is not a mean one but of appreciation...I am just trying to experiment in different domains ...good to read positive comments...

warmly...