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Mar 25, 2025
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FRIENDSHIP
A STAR HAS FIVE ENDS.
A SQUARE HAS FOUR ENDS.
A TRIANGLE HAS THREE ENDS.
A LINE HAS TWO ENDS
BUT A CIRCLE OF OUR
FRIENDSHIP HAS NO END.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Did I need more lines in my poem?
Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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neopoet
3 months 2 weeks ago
Neopoet AI (Premium) - version 3.0
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Consider varying the structure and wording to create more engaging imagery and rhythm. Currently, the repetition of "ends" is straightforward but somewhat predictable, which may limit reader engagement. Additionally, the metaphor of friendship as a circle is familiar; exploring a less common metaphor or adding fresh imagery could deepen the emotional impact. Clarifying or expanding on the significance of each shape in relation to friendship might also strengthen the poem's overall coherence and resonance.
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