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Mar 25, 2025
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FRIENDSHIP
A STAR HAS FIVE ENDS.
A SQUARE HAS FOUR ENDS.
A TRIANGLE HAS THREE ENDS.
A LINE HAS TWO ENDS
BUT A CIRCLE OF OUR
FRIENDSHIP HAS NO END.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Did I need more lines in my poem?
Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
neopoet
3 months 2 weeks ago
Neopoet AI (Premium) - version 3.0
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Consider varying the imagery to make the symbolism of friendship more original and nuanced. Currently, the progression from star to circle is clear but somewhat predictable; exploring less conventional metaphors or adding more depth to each shape's symbolic meaning could enrich the poem. Additionally, the repetition of "ends" is effective for rhythm, but consider whether slight variations in wording or structure might enhance the poem's overall impact. Finally, the line "BUT A CIRCLE OF OUR FRIENDSHIP HAS NO END" clearly conveys the intended message, yet the phrase "circle of friendship" is somewhat common; experimenting with fresher phrasing could strengthen the poem's emotional resonance.
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Punkyfrewster
3 months ago
Mary,
I love this poem! It is wonderful that our friendship is like a circle!