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IRiz
IRiz
Dec 12, 2018 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Frying Pan for One

Sometimes I feel I don't have a body
and yet just a pair of ears or wings
depending on what I focus on
listening or tumbling down the hill.

Sometimes I feel I have nobody.
And I enjoy my solitude
having one egg for breakfast
made on a small frying pan.

Salinger without a cover, the first pages
rounded and browned, lies on the table.
I drink coffee from a blue cup
and watch rain slowly freezing on
rhododendrons around my home.

I love them, the confused plants
started blooming last month.
There was a first snowstorm a week ago
but their buds keep opening showing
bright pink slightly curled insides.

I often feel like them out of context,
out of line over performer,
bright outlier under the layer of ice.

Coffee is almost over as well as
the story I picked to re-read for the morning.
I know the ending already.
But I don’t expect and I don't want
anything new from the dead.
I could re-read, re-listen, re-kiss
forever or at least while I breathe.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Washington DC, USA

Favorite Poets: Matsuo Bashō, Sylvia Plath, Charles Bukowski, TS Eliot, William Carlos Williams, Joseph Brodsky, Boris Pasternak, DH Lawrence, Robert Frost

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

6 years 6 months ago

I liked the use...

of "Nobody" and "no body" to denote a difference in perspective and the feeling of being alone and being okay with it. Books being a big part of my life; [whiling] away the time waiting for who or whatever, they are my constant companions. I enjoyed much. ~ Geezer.
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Eumolpus

Eumolpus

6 years 6 months ago

nice poem

love the Salinger reference. I like the way the poem handles the detachment.

I disagree with the above comment, I do not like "no body" because a poem is meant do be read aloud, and so sounds like "nobody"...just as easy to say

Sometimes I feel I don't have a body
just a pair of eyes, ears, or wings....

then in the next stanza, "nobody" works as it should.

But the central idea and sentiment of the poem comes through. nice images.
Here I would give a sight trim...

And I enjoy my solitude
having one egg for breakfast
made on a small frying pan (don't have to repeat "for one")

Hope I'm not one of your old friends, maybe new things might come from our correspondence! Hope so!
..

IRiz

IRiz

6 years 6 months ago

Mark, dear.

Mark, dear.
You always surprise me.
The old friends in the poem are mostly books whose authors passed away and yet even they give me a new food for thought when I reread them.
Thank you for your suggestions. I think you are right the first line may sound better as "I don't have a body". I have to sleep on it I am very inert when it is about making changes.

lovedly

lovedly

6 years 6 months ago

so beautiful

only one thing common with me
I too have a single egg
being too aged