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Jul 12, 2018
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Full Like The Sun
The sun does not have
Many faces
It sees all
And never turns away
The moon, however,
Is more like me:
Sometimes I feel
Like only a sliver
Sometimes I am growing
Steadily
Like a coffee cup, filling
Sometimes I try to
Silently disappear,
Run away
Though a part of me
Still gets caught
In light:
A part
Sometimes I am full
Like the sun
But only for a couple of days
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Comments
Sparrow
5 years 10 months ago
Greg
I liked this write, though it reflects a mood of staying put, I hope the next piece will be reaching out even beyond the stars, Yours Ian T