Garland Horse

faded
from all the turns
against the sun
these rains have
washed and blessed you
into pale sweetness

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Region, Country: north ontario, CAN

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Comments

Esker

14 years 5 months ago

troise riviere

slate grey
crumbled
and the river
calm as sterling
the dark moist
hills rising
into translucent
clouds

ascension
is the scene
of passivity
and gentleness
and wild
hearted

I still remember
that

and the carnival
horses
waiting in the feild
bolted to their
stand

the rain making everything
bright and sad.......

lou

14 years 5 months ago

Hi

Your poetry is so wonderfully visual.

I have no suggestions , just praise,

Fab!!!!

Love Lou

Nordic cloud

14 years 5 months ago

while the horses fire and steam

Dear American native man, Steven,

The comment is so wonderfully placid,
while the horses fire and steam
in dew damp dawn
rises up
to sing of their tale of life,
just beautiful.

Before I wrote the above I wrote this:-

Your delicate breath floats down
and brushes your consciousness
as you see the dark silhouette
of what once was,
it is now become pale and sweet.

Love to you aux trois rivière our Steven.

Kailashana2

14 years 5 months ago

sleep no more, my love

sleep no more, my love
our silhouettes ride the dawn
paling as the moon