Gaze

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Gaze" is a reflection on longing, time, and the power of unspoken words. The theme is well-chosen and universal, which can resonate with many readers.

The opening lines effectively establish the emotional tone of the poem. The phrase "When your gaze/Catches mine" is a strong start, suggesting a moment of connection that the speaker deeply values.

The line "I yearn for fleeting moments/To become eternal ones," introduces the concept of time and the speaker's desire to prolong these moments of connection. This is a compelling exploration of the human condition and our desire to hold onto moments that are inherently temporary.

The phrase "for every gaze/to become memorable" could benefit from further development. It might be more impactful to delve deeper into why these gazes are significant and what makes them memorable to the speaker.

The transition "But than,/I remember that" appears to contain a typo. The correct spelling should be "then" instead of "than". This is a minor issue but correcting it will improve the overall presentation of the poem.

The final lines "But my words are unheard/like whispers/Carried away by the wind" effectively convey a sense of frustration and longing. The comparison of the speaker's words to whispers carried away by the wind is a powerful image that encapsulates the speaker's feelings of being unheard.

Overall, the poem has a strong emotional core and explores its themes effectively. With some minor adjustments and further development of certain ideas, it could be even more impactful.

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that you have fallen victim to the current craze of "Not much in the way of punctuation",
which inevitably leads to using upper and lower case letters improperly. I'm sure that if you read this through
you will see what I mean. It is not really big deal, in so much as the content of the poem, but vital in the way that it is read,
and perhaps understood. Yes, I have experienced love from a distance, and it rings true here. Nice stuff. ~ Geezer.
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Someday maybe we'll be able to know others thoughts, but maybe we're not quite there yet. It may be destructive until our characters are polished and we no longer leave traces of earth's stains in our communications. great writing!