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raj

Dec 01, 2018 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Gesture [Attempted Haiku]

hand on her shoulder
worth a million flowers
blooming in desert

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Also an attempt at implied imagery

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

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Comments

6 years 7 months ago

hmmmm,

hmmmm,
i am not sure what does it mean?
hand on her shoulder

R

6 years 7 months ago

Hi IRiz

it's a gesture of consolation...that's what is implied...
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6 years 7 months ago

Maybe than her hand on my

Maybe than her hand on my shoulder?

6 years 7 months ago

Maybe than her hand on my

Maybe than her hand on my shoulder?

R

6 years 7 months ago

Hi IRiz

yes it could be what you said, but here it is intended to be a gesture of comforting her who is feeling desolate, hence the third line has the word desert..
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6 years 7 months ago

my thought raj

this is when one is bereaved
and you place a hand
as in a hug around the shoulders
silent consolation it conveys
immensely

R

6 years 7 months ago

Thanks for reading Lovedly.

Thanks for reading Lovedly.

Yes it is a gesture of comforting someone but not necessarily during bereavement but whenever someone feels alone or desolate.
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