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Dec 17, 2023
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Getting Old (some language)
I've accepted that life is a dance
I've spoken in romance and rants
but physically speaking
my joints are a'creaking
I'm leaking and shitting my pants
so, I keep near to places with loos
and dry myself out drinking booze
it's a hell of way
to fritter a day
you could say it's a way to amuse
and I guess that I'm less of a catch
than a slob or a dolt or a letch
getting old is a beast
oh, I'm moldy and creased
but at least I'm not Obi the Wretch!
— Triskelion, Dec 17, 2023
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About This Poem
Last Few Words: quick multiverse limerick inspired by one of the challenges. Always an upside to everything. Cheers, Obi! ....edit..Changed wording in last verse.
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Rough draft
Critiques
Ruby Lord
2 years 5 months ago
Ha ha this was good and made
Ha ha this was good and made me chuckle. I'm sure Obi will appreciate the damp patches of your poetry. Ruby :) xx
Triskelion
2 years 5 months ago
Hi Ruby Lord
Glad this quickie brought a chuckle to your day!
Thomas
Alex Tanner
2 years 5 months ago
Brilliant
Abso bloody brilliant. Alex
Triskelion
2 years 5 months ago
Glad you
liked this Alex. I certainly enjoyed writing it!
Thomas
Obadiah Grey
2 years 5 months ago
Happy to admit, its all too
Happy to admit, its all too true !
But only a wizened old "follow through" of a fart
such as you could make me laugh.
Nice one mate!
Obi
Triskelion
2 years 5 months ago
Ahh...
..my favourite pin cushion. Always happy to deliver a smile to the downtrodden!
Thomas
Lavender
2 years 5 months ago
Getting Old
Hello, Thomas -
I bow to your limericks! You are the king!
L
Triskelion
2 years 5 months ago
Hi Lavender
I enjoy writing limericks, it's true. Ever since I first started reading at all, they were there and they've stuck over the many years. Still waiting to write that one perfect zinger, though!
Thank you for enjoying!
Thomas
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