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Jackweb
Jackweb
Oct 09, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the contest:

Neopoem Of The Week Contest October 9th to October 15th 2022 🏆 Winner

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GIFT OF NATURE

The mother earth is adorned with wonderful trees,
with green leaves dancing round about,
the sweet breeze smiling genuinely good,
and the giant mountain wilderness stands erect.

the gift of nature is devine embellishments,
it's beautification is the architectural hand of God,
the beautiful azure sky hanging above in greatness,
and the sun alone electrifying the entire cosmos.

the gift of nature is one the greatest expression of love,
and it is heartily proven by the visible things we've seen,
look around and see the fertility of a vast land,
the wide oceans and the sparkling streams.

The dense forests and the wide range of mountains,
the animals, birds and the insects that be.
if there's no evidence of a living God without no creation,
would all these have come to be?

©® ONYINYECHI COSMOS ETU

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Imo State - Republic of Biafra(Nigeria), NGA

Favorite Poets: Late Christopher Okigbo, Wole soyinka, Maya Angelou, W.H. Longfellow, John Milton, W.B. Yeat.

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Comments

Lavender

Lavender

2 years 8 months ago

Gift of Nature

Hi, Jackweb,
Mother Earth is beyond our intelligence...perfection in every way. Your poem shows gratitude and respect for our beautiful planet. I like your title a lot - it all is truly a gift.
Thank you!
L

Jackweb

Jackweb

2 years 8 months ago

Wow

Thanks a bunch for reading and commenting.
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Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 8 months ago

Beautiful

Very beautiful observational poetry. I’m very fond of it. I’m an atheist in regards to organized religion but you may find me reviving communion amongst the trees in the forest near my home.

Nice job,
Tim

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 8 months ago

Beautiful

Very beautiful observational poetry. I’m very fond of it. I’m an atheist in regards to organized religion but you may find me reviving communion amongst the trees in the forest near my home.

Nice job,
Tim

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 8 months ago

I will...

echo the comments that have been made previously. I like your title; the body of the poem is pretty good, and I think that your understanding of English grows with every post. A couple of things I would pay particular importance to:

1]. leaves, instead of [leafs]
2]. I would use [evidence] instead of [existence].

~ Geez.
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Jackweb

Jackweb

2 years 8 months ago

Great job!

Much appreciated esteemed poet - Geezeer! Will edit right away!
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Geezer

Geezer

2 years 8 months ago

Yes...

Two thumbs up!
~Geez.
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K

Kristen H.

2 years 8 months ago

Congrats!

Congratulations on the win! Well deserved! This is a beautiful poem.

Jackweb

Jackweb

2 years 8 months ago

Oh yes !

Thanks so much precious sister and respected poet!
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Jackweb

Jackweb

2 years 8 months ago

Thanks!

Much appreciated esteemed poet.
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Celso G. Tertins

Celso G. Tertins

2 years 8 months ago

reminds me a bit of joyce

reminds me a bit of joyce kilmer's poem, trees. but this poem feels more about a vast beautiful country with many diverse lands in it. a showcase of earthly beauty.

Seren

Seren

2 years 4 months ago

Congratulations

On a very fine poem and the win!

I would edit the format some but other than that I see nothing to critique

Kind regards Seren

Jackweb

Jackweb

2 years 4 months ago

Thanks...

so much for reading and commenting. I'm glad you liked it
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