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Barbara Writes

Apr 04, 2016 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

This poem is part of the contest:

April 2016 - Limerick - Prize -$25 USD Amazon.com Gift Certificate

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A Girl Eating Stew (April Contest)

There was a girl eating stew,
she had nothing else to do
standing outside in the cold
all the malls had closed,
so she went instead to the zoo

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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Comments

9 years 2 months ago

I like

this logical lass. Indeed, who can blame her?

9 years 2 months ago

Lol

Thanks glad you like it

9 years 2 months ago

Hi Barbara

I liked this but I find that it doesn't stick to the rules of the contest which are

1. Anapestic
2.5 lines
3. Rhyming pattern AABBA.

Alid

9 years 2 months ago

Oh

Thanks don't know much about limericks.

I worked on AABBA and five lines
How is my anaspest

9 years 2 months ago

Hi Barbara

to be honest, I don't think I'm the right person to ask. All I know about anapest is its pattern
(unstress, unstress, stress)
I've seen the examples from the contest's instructions but I can't see the anapestic rhythm.

Alid

R

9 years 2 months ago

Hi Barbara

i liked this one...i believe it's posted as a limerick and not anapest and it made me smile ...

If I may suggest, you could add a few words to make it flo even more smoothly...just a suggestion..

There was a girl eating stew,
she had nothing [else] to do
standing outside in the cold
all the malls was [had just] closed,
so she went [instead] to the zoo.

Regards,

9 years 2 months ago

Thanks raj

I like it

9 years 2 months ago

Ok

Thanks

9 years 2 months ago

Thanks chompy

Sounds good I like it