Give Them Mercy

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:

This poem explores the evolution of the speaker’s emotional landscape, moving from innocence and empathy toward a hardened, hate-filled state, and then expressing a desire to reclaim compassion. The repetition of “the world taught me to hate” effectively underscores the external forces shaping the speaker’s transformation, creating a rhythmic refrain that emphasizes the pervasive nature of learned hatred.

The juxtaposition between the small, intimate moment of a sister killing a spider and the broader societal influences (religion, country) is compelling. It grounds the abstract concept of hate in a tangible, relatable experience, which helps readers connect emotionally.

The poem’s shift back to vulnerability in the final lines—“I still do, / i’m trying to remember / how to love again”—introduces a note of hope and self-awareness. This closing plea for mercy is poignant and invites reflection on the possibility of healing and change.

Consider varying the repetition slightly to avoid redundancy while maintaining its impact. For example, introducing subtle changes in phrasing or rhythm could deepen the emotional resonance. Additionally, the lowercase “i’m” stands out; deciding whether this is intentional for stylistic effect or a typographical oversight would clarify the tone.

Overall, the poem’s strength lies in its honest portrayal of internal conflict and the societal pressures that shape personal attitudes. Expanding on specific images or moments—such as the spider or the concept of mercy—might enrich the sensory and emotional texture, making the plea for love and mercy even more compelling.

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Good poem.

the world taught me to hate
the world taught me to hate
religion taught me to hate

Maybe you don't need the first 2 lines, likewise with my country taught me...

Hello, Ranae,

The honesty is so raw...

I understood this on all levels.  I, too, was taught to hate through the world, my country, and my religion. It takes a daily affirmation to remember how to love and show mercy.

Thank you,

Lavender

the statement of: "I still do" seems contrary to the lines of:

"now I crush them without flinching
and I kill them without crying."

I would delete that line and continue with,

I'm trying to remember
how to love again

give it mercy, 
give them mercy.

I used to believe that spiders of any kind would bite you if they could, due to the reaction of other people. I have read many articles about spiders since my youth, and I now know that many spiders don't even have strong enough mandibles to penetrate your skin, and most of them will try to run away if you touch them. Most bites are from spiders that are crushed between you and wherever they are, and purely in self-defense.

Nicely done; the juxtaposition of this piece is very good. ~ Geezer.
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