Geezer

Jun 17, 2020 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

This poem is part of the workshop:

Gloves and Masks... [Title Shop]

I saw the Mime, with his gloves and mask
He tried hard to make me smile
I didn't think he was up to the task
Because, I hadn't smiled for a while

His silent laughter was so very plain
He had it in him, I realized
To take away my hurt and pain
I could see the smile in his eyes

He was no different than I'd seen before
His mask and gloves were of white
Black skin covered, he was hard to ignore
His merriment showed, his heart was light

I felt ashamed of my heavy heart
And so I laughed, I laughed out loud
I thought to myself, "I should do my part"
And I laughed with the rest of the crowd.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Thank you to Rula for the nifty title! She is an inspiration to us here,

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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Comments

scribbler

5 years ago

Hi Geeze

I think this is very good for such a quickie

Geezer

5 years ago

Thanks...

As soon as I saw the Mask and Gloves title, I thought of a Mime. I just kind of came to me, that here was someone who is striving to make the world a little less scary and a bit brighter. ~ Gee.
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Rula

5 years ago

I thought this is really awesome and not without a noble message. Respect what others offer no matter how trivial it looks to you.
Well done re the suggested title. I won't have done it better myself.
Thank you.

P.s. You've chosen the "primal Poetry workshop where neededto choose the "Title workshop" instead.

Geezer

5 years ago

I'm thinking...

that you would have as well, if not better. You have imagination and a good heart; plus you gave me a great title!
Geez.
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Geezer

5 years ago

You did...

give me something to think about and I shortened a couple of lines and made the rhythm a little better. Thank you!
~ Geez.
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c lynn brooks

5 years ago

Gee

There is a message in your poem for all to see
Laugh no matter how much you hurt inside
who knows perhaps your mime washurting inside one never knows
what akind word or just a smile might do for a oerson

your poem holds a message for us all. smile and laugh no matter how much it hurts
give a smile or a kind word to someone as you never know what is going on insside
who know perhaps your mime was hurting inside but gave pleasure non the less

Geezer

5 years ago

I think you know...

me a little better than I thought. Yes, that was my intent, to take what he gave and give a little back; letting him know that he was appreciated. ~ Gee.
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Lavender

5 years ago

Gloves and Masks

Hi, Geezer,
Aw...quite the unselfish giver, your Mime. You, too!
Thank you!
L

Geezer

5 years ago

Thank you so much...

You make me smile. I had a good time with this and I feel like that Mime must have; as he made those people smile and laugh. ~ Geez.
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