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Edna Sweetlove
Edna Sweetlove
Jan 07, 2020 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

God's Diary, January 20000 BC - Seven Holy Haiku

Monday 1st January, 20000 BC

Started work today
The oceans were quite hard graft
Went for a nice swim
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Tuesday 2nd January, 20000 BC

I invented fish
No fire yet so ate them raw
Got a tummy ache
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Wednesday 3rd January, 20000 BC

Dry land was harder
But I managed it OK
Ate another fish
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Thursday 4th January, 20000 BC

Lots of fun with fire
Managed to fry a haddock
Burned fingers badly
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Friday 5th January, 20000 BC

Totally busy day
Animals took me ages
Had steak for supper
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Saturday 6th January, 20000 BC

Invented people
They have a will of their own
And they fuck a lot
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Sunday 7th January, 20000 BC

Feeling tired now
I'm done with all my labours
Time for a good kip
_____

Memo to myself: stop writing fucking haiku.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: London, Culture Capital of the World

Favorite Poets: Siegfried Sassoon, Wilfred Owen, Rupert Brooke, Chaucer, Shakespeare to name but a few. And VERY IMPORTANTLY: Erich Fried, a leftwing Austrian of Jewish ancestry who fled the Nazis and became a British citizen in 1949., And, other writers (non-poets mainly): Raymond Chandler, Irvine Welsh, Anthony Burgess, Graham Greene, Charles Bukowski, John le Carré, Anthony Horowitz, Mick Herron, Margaret Attwood, Edna O'Brian, Maeve Binchy., Writers who I find vastly over-rated: TS Eliot, Virgina Woolf, Sylvia Plath, Phil Larkin, E.A. Poe, A. Ginsburg, Longfellow, Gerald Manley Hopkins (actually I LOATHE Hopkins more than damson-dappled words can say).

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Comments

Edna Sweetlove

Edna Sweetlove

5 years 10 months ago

Dear Obi

"Godists" is a good word. I nornmally call them godsquad or bible-bashers. But "godist" is nice. How about "godomisers"?

Geezer

Geezer

5 years 10 months ago

I didn't...

understand the use of the word [graft] in the line "The oceans were quite hard graft". Could you explain?
I actually enjoyed this one. ~ Geezer.
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Edna Sweetlove

Edna Sweetlove

5 years 10 months ago

Graft =

Hard Work. Origin is C19, British informal. Hard graft therefore = VERY hard work indeed.

Pleased you liked it.
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Geezer

Geezer

5 years 9 months ago

Okay...

I thought it had something to do with work. Funny, how a word like that can show up the differences in the dialect of a standard language. ~ Geezer.
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