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OriginalRhyku

Feb 13, 2018 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Going for Broke:

Broke something for my play
It was never perfect anyway
So I reasoned what to say
That no way would I pay

About This Poem

Last Few Words: The Pottery Barn rule is an American expression alluding to a policy of "you break it, you bought it" or “you break it, you buy it” or "you break it, you remake it", by which a retail store holds a customer responsible for damage done to merchandise on display. Does this only apply to customers (persons) and not to countries?

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Asia India

Favorite Poets: Rabindranath Tagore, Shakespeare among many more

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Comments

7 years 2 months ago

and if OriginalRhyku breaks his own rules

who's gonna pay for that?

I'm going to hold my breath and turn blue till I get my pressie.

O

7 years 2 months ago

Weirdelf

Thanks for your review but I am perplexed, which of my rules did I break?

7 years 2 months ago

I thought the rules

for line count and syllables for rhyku were the same as for haiku. You often write that way.
My bad.

[turning bluer]

O

7 years 2 months ago

Weirdelf

As you may have noticed, this is a four line poem that is neither Haiku nor Rhyku - more like a free verse rhyme. Cheers.