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Feb 20, 2025
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Going with the Flow
In the rhythm
the gentle pace
that is meant to be
the presence
the here and now.
Not even thinking
just feeling
and using your emotions.
Slowly
Gently
Calmly
And still reaching your destination.
Moving
Floating
in a dreamlike state
but still aware.
No particular purpose
just the being.
Very serene
and status quo.
Not even asking questions.
Not even alert.
Just there.
All over my body
and in each part.
Understanding
that to be like this
is wonderful.
Not just a great start to the day.
Only beautiful
to feel like this.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Describing what it feels like after my yoga nidra session . Only the emotions and the sense of calm which emerges in the immediate aftermath of that session. So blissfully wonderful.
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
neopoet
4 months 3 weeks ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Going with the Flow" conveys a sense of peacefulness and mindfulness through its imagery and gentle rhythm. The repetition of words like "gentle," "slowly," and "calmly" effectively conveys the idea of being in the present moment and embracing a serene state of mind. The poem captures the essence of letting go of control and simply existing in the moment.
One suggestion for improvement could be to explore more vivid and specific sensory details to further enhance the reader's immersion in the experience you are describing. This could help create a more tangible and vivid picture of the dreamlike state you are portraying. Additionally, consider varying the structure or adding more complexity to the language to add depth to the poem and engage the reader on multiple levels.
Overall, the poem effectively conveys a sense of tranquility and mindfulness, but further development of imagery and language could enrich the reader's experience and make the poem even more impactful.
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