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Feb 20, 2025
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Going with the Flow
In the rhythm
the gentle pace
that is meant to be
the presence
the here and now.
Not even thinking
just feeling
and using your emotions.
Slowly
Gently
Calmly
And still reaching your destination.
Moving
Floating
in a dreamlike state
but still aware.
No particular purpose
just the being.
Very serene
and status quo.
Not even asking questions.
Not even alert.
Just there.
All over my body
and in each part.
Understanding
that to be like this
is wonderful.
Not just a great start to the day.
Only beautiful
to feel like this.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Describing what it feels like after my yoga nidra session . Only the emotions and the sense of calm which emerges in the immediate aftermath of that session. So blissfully wonderful.
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
neopoet
4 months 3 weeks ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Going with the Flow" effectively captures the essence of being present in the moment and embracing a serene state of mind. The use of gentle imagery and rhythmic flow contributes to the overall calming effect of the poem. However, there are areas where the poem could be strengthened. Consider incorporating more vivid and specific sensory details to enhance the reader's experience and deepen the emotional impact of the poem. Additionally, exploring the theme of purpose or reflection further could add layers of complexity to the poem and engage the reader on a deeper level. Overall, continue to build upon the foundation of tranquility and mindfulness established in the poem to create a more immersive and resonant piece.
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