Lavender

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Going, Going, Gone

One day,
she became "Was"

found and filled
her cause

put her ego-self
on pause

gave the world
its due applause

grit her teeth through
menopause

laughed at all
her flaws

had great sex...
just because

then

rode the
Rainbow Ride
to Oz

About This Poem

Last Few Words: The thrilling Ride to whatever is eternally beyond the Rainbow.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser, Jim Harrison, Billy Collins, Paul Simon, Robert Frost. I like minimalist poetry, and poems reflecting on nature and Mother Earth.

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Comments

Candlewitch

10 months 2 weeks ago

Dear Lavender,

this is a delightful poem about a free wheelin' woman full of life and experiencing every bit of it!

*hugs, Cat

p.s.
in the last few sentences about Oz, was that pertaining to her death? if so, she went out with a bang!

Lavender

10 months 2 weeks ago

Yes, she is definitely a freewheelin' woman! And yes, eventually taking that final ride over the rainbow. I think as we get older we are much less inhibited, and life is less baloney and more spirit. Or maybe it's just me...
Thank you for reading!
Lx

Rula

10 months 2 weeks ago

Dear Lavender

This is a bit different from your pen. A delightful piece indeed to capture the journey of self- discovery maybe.
I like everything about this poem especially it's brevity and directness.
Hard to choose favorite lines.
Enjoyed the read as always.
Thank you for sharing dear.

Lavender

10 months 2 weeks ago

Hello, Rula!

You are correct - a bit different. Felt pretty sassy when writing this. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I always appreciate your comments and help.
Thank you!
Lx

Triskelion

10 months 2 weeks ago

Cute!

..enjoyed the rhyme scheme..
.
Thomas

Lavender

10 months 2 weeks ago

Hello, Thomas!

Thank you very much for reading this little rhyme!
L

Leslie

8 months 3 weeks ago

Ging, Going, Gone

It was a little sassy, but in the end it turned out just right. I wish that I could loose my inhibitions and take that rainbow ride. This read so smoothly I liked the line "put her ego self on pause". It fit together well and its meaning came through easily. I enjoyed the words of hope and how we have to fight to find ourselves througout all of lifes vicissitudes. This was a wonderful write!

Lavender

8 months 3 weeks ago

Hello, Leslie,

Yes, the sassy in me tends to have a lot of fun!
Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts!
I appreciate you!
L