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Mar 06, 2025
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Golden Rings
Circular motion formed in a gold band made special for the Man and Women.
Before the Father and the Son is formed the union from Our everlasting joining of hands.
The gold band a symbol of unity between Man and Woman that is ordained by God.The law of God's institution forever made a law in the Old Testament Bible.
When the Golden band is placed circular on her finger.
Our Bond is formed with God the moment of our everlasting pledge.
Golden Rings placed together forms their union.
God forever bonds their union̈ when all is formed the Golden Rings.
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Consider clarifying the central imagery and symbolism of the "golden rings" to enhance thematic coherence. Currently, the poem repeats similar ideas about unity and divine ordination without fully developing or deepening them. To strengthen the piece, consider varying the language and imagery to avoid redundancy. Additionally, pay attention to grammatical consistency and punctuation—for instance, "Man and Women" should likely be "Man and Woman," and spacing or punctuation errors such as "union̈" should be corrected. The poem could also benefit from more concrete imagery or sensory details to ground the abstract concepts of unity and divine bond, thus making the symbolism more vivid and engaging for the reader.
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