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brittle light
brittle light
May 29, 2016 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Goldfish

Of flowers and sunshiny poems;

limited episodes in rerun;
like a goldfish spinning 'round in a bowl;
nothing new under that sun.

Those of emo affect in lackluster tones;

a broken playlist, stuck on repeat.
Pity parties tire me out,
and not being young, I'd rather delete.

As for woo woo, and angels, and the heavens above;

all cringe worthy themes, stuck in a rut.
Preaching to a choir of fuzzy thinking coots
leaves me with nothing but... "what the fuck?!"

This is all about personal taste:

and I'm not the world's poetry cop.
I'm just as entrenched in my silly stuff,
much like that goldfish I mentioned at the top!

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: upstate New York USA, USA

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Geezer

Geezer

9 years 1 month ago

This is...

refreshing! I liked the format almost as much as I liked the poem. It's nice to see people get out of their box and to drag some of the rest of us out with them. ~ Gee.

brittle light

brittle light

9 years 1 month ago

thanks Gee,

thanks Gee,
a refreshing and inhappiating compliment to my 'poetic spirit'

p.s......I made up that word...as in 'inebriating'...sometimes, I just can't help myself!

regards,

Rula

Rula

9 years 1 month ago

I like this Al

I especially like the metaphor use of the golden fish.
I agree with you, themes might not be fresh any more, but different styles bring forth new way and display of the things.
Your piece is a good example of refreshing an old idea.
I really like it.
Thanks for sharing.

brittle light

brittle light

9 years 1 month ago

Hi Rula

And I agree with you. Finding new ways to speak of universal observations and truths is the only way we can justify continuing to write.
BUT, themes and content still stay very much in play, no matter the style in which they are presented...a well written, contemporary styled poem about something I have no interest in , will still be uninteresting to me ...that's ok, ain't it?

I'm very glad you liked this piece, and thank you for sharing your thoughts.

sincerely,