Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.
Aug 14, 2022
⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
On The Golf Course
The forecast threatened rain,
yet, there they were,
a brave foursome
armed with irons, and drivers,
wedges, and putters
paying homage to the green,
praying to the benevolent
Deity of the Hole-In-One.
They had mastered par,
battled with a birdie,
and clashed courageously
against provoking divots
throughout the hostile downpour.
But it was the bolt of lightening
that sent them scrambling to the 19th Hole,
fully aware that a golf cart
can only fly
so fast.
***
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Jackweb
2 years 11 months ago
Evocative!
'[The forecast threatened rain,'] That's a very powerful figurative language that heightened the effect of this poem. I glued my eye and read it twice to assimilate the usage of this strong personanification.
A raindrop impacts a bare soil surface something like a metal ball striking the surface. The energy of the raindrop impact is transferred to the soil particles directly under the drop.
Nicely weaved !
.
Lavender
2 years 11 months ago
Hello, Jackweb,
I do not golf, but have observed from a distance. Sometimes it looks pretty fierce. Yes, those raindrops must hurt! I appreciate your reading and commenting!
Thank you!
L
Jackweb
2 years 11 months ago
Alright
You are welcome.
Then you must be a good observer.
.