Good Guys Lose

Good guys always lose the fight
because they hesitate to pull the trigger
it don't take rocket science to figure
it ain't easy to put out the light.

Bad guys always lose cos they spend
time gloating and telling their story
of how clever they are, all spattered and gory
till the writer works out the proper end.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Just wonder if this might be worth expanding. Came out of my head as is.

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Sydney, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: The Romantics, The Mersey Sound, The Beats and, of course, The Bard

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Comments

weirdelf

8 years ago

I would like to say

Bad guys always lose the battle
but I can't think of a rhyme for battle.

scribbler

8 years ago

Hmmm....,Hmmmm.....

Rattle , prattle atlatl, cattle, sprattle, any of these help?

Candlewitch

8 years ago

I like the theme! although in my experience, the bad guys seem to make out better in the end. but they lose in the dignity and honor columns, in my book. I think this is worth expanding on. rhymes for battle: cattle, rattle, prattle and tattle are ones that come to mind. (and saddle)

ps
I'll fix my entry in an hour. thanks :)

weirdelf

8 years ago

That's kind of the point, in the last line

it's only writers that tend to insist on happy endings with the good guys winning (depending on who you're barracking for. I tend to be on the side of Eddy Styx, Alex Machette and their ilk). Hmmm, I'll wait for a bit more feedback to see if I need to make that point more clearly. I prefer writing short, haikus and limericks and stuff, if I can still say what I need to. The 3 things I wanted to say here are why good guys hesitate to kill, why bag guys do and what writers do.

Prattle is good, and tattle, I can work with that, thanks.