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lou

Mar 04, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Good riddance

Jagged incision
Without precision,
or medical intervention

Bloody red gash
Sliced into wrist,
Oozing the vital fluid.

Losing the will to live,
losing consciousness
Fuck this world.

Good riddance

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I warn those that are cluless to ignore this poem, fuck with me at your peril, I've had enough shit.

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

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Comments

14 years 4 months ago

Bee

Thanks

Love Lou

S

14 years 4 months ago

hi lou

Could well be the last thoughts of a suicide. As to shit, I keep a small bag of dried bullshit handy so I don't have to take any from others lol................scribbler

14 years 4 months ago

Stan

I love you, I think you're great.

Much love Lou

M

14 years 4 months ago

Hi Lou

How are things going in here. Missed reading all of you and just stopping in and seen this the first post. I will try to get on this weekend and write something.

Hope all is well by you

Love and miss you

Magics

14 years 4 months ago

Hi darling

I'll pm you

Love lou

14 years 4 months ago

Sweetie

Thank you , as always a lovely comment.

love lou

14 years 4 months ago

Love the darkness

I love the darkness of this write, it probably is the last scene of many lives.I loved it lou,

14 years 4 months ago

KZ

Thank you, some would say that I should lighten up LOL !!!!

Love Lou

14 years 4 months ago

Joe

Thank you , it's a mixture of personal feelings and fiction.

lou

14 years 4 months ago

xena

thank you

lou

14 years 4 months ago

Dear Lou,

In these lines:

Jagged incision without
Without precision,

I think it would read better without one of the "without"(s)

A chilling little write. I think it would be interesting if you recorded a thought from the last moment of action, such as:

Last moment of hope
All has come before
Desperation brings clarity

or something like that,

This is a good piece of depressing poetry.

love, Cat

14 years 4 months ago

Cat

thank you

i'll give it some thought.

love lou