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Viviana Smith
Viviana Smith
Aug 23, 2021 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the challenge:

Neopoet Random Challenge 6

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Green eyed boy(I wish)

Your emerald green eyes draw in my heart
I hate the days we are apart
I love your smile, your twisted grin
Your heart's the prize I hope to win
I see you stare at the black haired girl
Like in your eyes she's a shiny pearl
I wish your gaze would fall on me
But if it did I'm sure I'd flee
So in my heart I'll always find
That green eyed boy I wish was mine

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Texas USA

Favorite Poets: Shel Silverstein , Frost

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

3 years 10 months ago

I like this...

[Not to pry], but is this real? You have written, what I call a crush-poem and a good one! There is only one thing that I would change and I'm not sure that it would make any difference. I would change the [was] in the last line; to [were]. Glad you stopped by, nice to see that you haven't lost all interest in us. Please keep writing whenever you can. Been wondering how your stories are going? Anything new? ~ Geez.
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Viviana Smith

Viviana Smith

3 years 10 months ago

hahaha

Yes this is real,
I have been writing stories and I just started at a new school who is able to help me become a better writer.
Thanks so much, i started reading this book about this girl writing poetry in this secret society, and i was remided of this site so i decided to write a poem.

Viviana Smith

Viviana Smith

3 years 10 months ago

yes

im the girl in love with the green eyed boy

Triskelion

Triskelion

3 years 10 months ago

Yes

Please write here more often. I really enjoyed your "crush" poem and there are people here that can help with writing, too.

Thomas

Viviana Smith

Viviana Smith

3 years 10 months ago

Thanks!!

I love this site but i kinda haven't been here in a while. I'll keep writing tho. ;)

Geezer

Geezer

3 years 10 months ago

So glad that...

you keep coming back. It really means something to us, to have our family keep in touch.
~ Geez.
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Obadiah Grey

Obadiah Grey

3 years 10 months ago

Oh, I think you are going to

Oh, I think you are going to have a wonderful life, Miss Smith.
Go get your "green eyed boy",
use him,
slightly abuse him,
I'm pretty sure he'll be grateful. (I know I was)

Obi.