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Feb 02, 2026
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Groundhog day 2026 or Forty five days since 2025 Winter Solstice
As promised to beloved readers of mine
herewith follows a poem heralding spring.
Already noticeably marked
increase in daylight
yours truly courtesy affected
qua heliotropic phenomenon
finds me noggin gently being tugged
upward and westward ho toward sun
after dark mine talking head
rests downward and eastward.
Soon very indistinct
environmental intimations
regarding onomatopoeic
ubiquitous murmurings,
whereby old man winter
ever so faintly
relinquishes, loosens, forsakes...
Judas Priest iron maiden grip
upon emergent biosphere
suddenly awakened when
Mother Earth generates
invisible signals transmitted
across world wide web
analogous to conductor
standing on podium
with baton in her/his hand
orchestra playing on cue
perhaps choice selection
Rite of Spring
work by Russian composer Igor Stravinsky
or Flight of the Bumblebee
written by Nikolai Rimsky-Korsakov.
Sooner than six more weeks
dormant species will exhibit rebirth
out their linkedin hibernation
flora and fauna tentatively
begin to issue forth out their slumbers
shoots poke thru across terra firma
in-sync with twittering tweeting creatures
hint viz verdant and/or fecund potential
ready to burst forth and proliferate
instinctively trumpeting joie de vivre.
Sensational show stopping, eye catching
breathtaking... parade of sights and sounds
await buzz-feeding eyes and ears
within the next upcoming six weeks hence,
within mine home box office
here at Highland Manor apartments
quite affordable rent
allows, enables and provides
radiant quiescence, preponderant observance,
nonresistant magnificence, jubilant innocence,
exuberant deliverance,
concurrent buoyant abundance.
Accordingly and allegedly other than
meteorologists plenti schooled
ascertaining onset of temperate air
more particularly otter den non humans
unassumingly (ferreted out), who bear
the tidings, when that season
of rebirth dawns with crystal clear
blue skies, and terrain where deer
and antelope eagerly play without despair
purportedly realized, reassured, recounted...drear
re: days vamoosed foretold by
Punxsutawney Phil, or
one of his progeny on Groundhog Day
February second - requires one
with acute hearing to cock, and ear
turnips tickling the nose nostrils
delicate hairs (instagram
ideal outlook) subtly,
markedly, lively..., yet gently flair
soon harkening shrieks
of delightful analogous funfair
no stranger to Renaissance Faire
of pitch perfect gamesomeness
will seem as... otherworldly pleasant
ah heaven sent giftware,
where all creatures great and small
sing psalms, upon arrival when hardware
trappings of winter shucked witnessing
unrolled welcome Scottish mat so hare
and tortoise can race,
cuz vernal equinox, sports a linkedin
improvisational, ebulliently
educational, cerebral, audiological...
twittering melange I will hear,
and grateful no defect doth impair
ability to revel silence, slake, soak...
insatiable thirst even prodding junketeer,
panhandler, vendor...
the last named,
perhaps selling kitchenware
knickknacks, keepsakes...
to hippies, and/or aging
long hair pencil neck geeks
(think yours truly)
with long wavy hair
interwoven with Kahila
Garden Lily, Laurel, Maidenhair...
profusion of sensual delight
brings Mother Earth near,
the body, mind, and soul
espying frolicsome Homo sapiens
donned with minimal outerwear
infusing all living things
common native plants and animals
in conjunction with resident outlier
particularly those pining
to answer call of the wild overdare
ring and bee zee lee court'n prepare
ring to beget young as
singular requisite quintessential profiteer
fluttering, instagramming emoji,
sans shutterfly puppeteer
as audience visually already reddit
regarding acting entire scenes,
viz Biblical Genesis answering prayer
particularly if gnostic, heterodox, queer...,
finally relieved, sans polar vortex
albeit somewhat rare
atmospheric phenomena, how ideal
if said rabid Jack Frost
would sink icy bite - part
and parcel green gang
at much more favorably time reappear
during oppressive heat spell during
sweltering triple digits temperature
summer re: at various times
throughout the year
across the world arbitrarily
and randomly zeroing in on
The Democratic Republic of the Congo,
also known as Congo-Kinshasa,
DRC, DR Congo,
or simply the Congo
and known from 1971–1997 as Zaire.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
neopoet
2 months 3 weeks ago
Neopoet AI [2025-04]
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
This poem ambitiously captures the transition from winter to spring through a dense, richly allusive stream of consciousness. The thematic core—the anticipation of seasonal rebirth and the natural world's awakening—is compelling and timely. However, the poem’s effectiveness is somewhat hindered by several factors that could be addressed to enhance clarity and impact.
1. **Structure and Pacing**: The poem unfolds as a continuous flow of ideas and images with minimal punctuation or stanza breaks. This creates a breathless, almost overwhelming experience for the reader. Introducing deliberate stanza breaks or line groupings could provide natural pauses that allow the reader to absorb the imagery and thematic shifts more fully. Consider segmenting the poem into sections that correspond to phases of seasonal change or different sensory experiences.
2. **Language and Syntax**: The poem employs a high density of polysyllabic and technical vocabulary (“heliotropic phenomenon,” “onomatopoeic,” “preponderant observance”), which can sometimes obscure meaning rather than illuminate it. While this erudition adds texture, balancing it with more accessible language or clearer syntactic structures would improve readability. For example, some lines feel syntactically convoluted, making it difficult to parse the intended meaning on first reading.
3. **Imagery and Allusion**: The poem’s rich allusions to music (Stravinsky’s *Rite of Spring*, Rimsky-Korsakov’s *Flight of the Bumblebee*), technology (LinkedIn, Twitter, Instagram, Reddit), and cultural references (Punxsutawney Phil, Renaissance Faire) create a layered tapestry that reflects contemporary life’s intersection with nature. However, the rapid shifts among these references sometimes feel disjointed. More explicit connective tissue or thematic framing could help unify these elements. For instance, clarifying how social media metaphors relate to natural phenomena might strengthen the poem’s conceptual coherence.
4. **Tone and Voice**: The poem’s voice is conversational and occasionally self-referential (“think yours truly”), which lends intimacy but can also disrupt the immersive natural imagery. Deciding whether the poem’s persona is a detached observer, an engaged participant, or a hybrid could help stabilize the tone. If the goal is to blend personal reflection with environmental observation, consider weaving these voices more seamlessly.
5. **Use of Humor and Playfulness**: The poem includes moments of playful language (“turnips tickling the nose nostrils,” “hippies, and/or aging long hair pencil neck geeks”), which add charm and personality. These moments work best when balanced with more grounded imagery. Ensuring that humor serves the poem’s larger thematic aims rather than distracting from them will enhance overall cohesion.
6. **Ending and Resolution**: The poem concludes with a somewhat abrupt geopolitical reference to the Democratic Republic of the Congo, which feels disconnected from the preceding natural and cultural imagery. If this is intended as a global reminder of environmental or social concerns, it might benefit from more explicit integration into the poem’s thematic arc or a clearer rationale for its placement.
**Recommendations for Revision**: - Introduce stanza breaks to improve pacing. - Simplify or clarify complex vocabulary and syntax where possible. - Strengthen thematic connections among diverse allusions. - Clarify the poem’s narrative voice and maintain consistent tone. - Balance playful elements with grounded imagery. - Reconsider the poem’s ending to ensure thematic unity.
Overall, the poem’s ambitious scope and rich detail are commendable, but refining its structure and clarity will allow its evocative celebration of spring’s arrival to resonate more powerfully.
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Mark
2 months 3 weeks ago
Ground hogs
Hello Jane!
About your poem. I try to stick as close as I can to the idea that poetry is as short as can be and still get the message across.
I think your poem is too long but I like it anyways.
About your title - I used to hunt those animals when I was a kid.
Try to make em shorter,
Mark