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Dec 21, 2022
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Guiding Light
Light the way with care
My lantern in the bleak
To live with you another day
Is all that I shall seek
The stairs are steep and winding
No matter up or down
Your spirit is my candle
So I may see uneven ground
Climbing spiral in the dark
Fumbling ascent
Christen me with falling tears
Produced from efforts spent
Thoughts pervade my day as well
Taunt me as they must
You’re there to shelter me from rain
So that I will not rust
Armor borne of need, around
A large and tender heart
Now it’s rendered obsolete
Although my fears are not
You disperse the shadows
Upon the battlefield
I will always be your sword
You will be my shield
If I fall take up my blade
With the passion our love made
Strike the fear unto the ground
Sow the earth with hope abound
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Candlewitch
2 years 6 months ago
dear Tim,
favorite lines are in the summation:
If I fall take up my blade
With the passion our love made
Strike the fear unto the ground
Sow the earth with hope abound
these are the heartbeat of a dedicated warrior. I love the whole poem and feel glad to have read it. it is selfless and brave, without pride getting in the way. to live and die for a cause that is noble. I salute you as one warrior to another.
*hugs & love, c.m. mattison
Geezer
2 years 6 months ago
Kudos to...
the unfailing romantic! I love how you let it all hang out in the adoration of your wife. She must be a very special lady. I feel the same about mine, so when you tap into that, it makes me feel like you have written about lovers all over the world. My favorite lines:
"Armor borne of need, around
A large and tender heart
Now it's rendered obsolete
Although my fears are not
Well done brother! ~ Geez.
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Rula
2 years 6 months ago
How beautiful
She must be flattered with this and any other lady should be envious, I included :)
Many great lines through out, but I thought the opening stanza is stunning.
Rula
2 years 6 months ago
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RoseBlack
2 years 6 months ago
Ever the romantic
I surely enjoy your endless tribute and unconditional love to your wife. She is a lucky woman to have such a devoted partner.
Candlewitch
2 years 6 months ago
hello Tim,
i thought I would bring this back to the top of the stream for a second look. nice work.
* hugs, (the) cat