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Feb 07, 2013
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Haiku - choking
I'm gasping for air
palpitating hearts rhythm
calm is conceded
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Seren
12 years 5 months ago
ello Eph
Lol @ false teeth I don't mind your mad mood
Very glad you liked my little haiku
Love Jc xxx
Ian.T
12 years 5 months ago
Jayne
A very good Haiku, you just rest a while and we will see you here again in a week or so, Yours thinking of you as always, Ian.T
Seren
12 years 5 months ago
No rest for the wicked !!
No rest for the wicked !! Very glad you liked my haiku
Talk to you very soon
Love always Jc xxx
Ian.T
12 years 5 months ago
Damn it Girl
You get orft and rest, we will wait for you no matter how long you rest.
BUT REST you MUST lol.
Will talk later I have a card to make ?? Yours as always Ian xx
Seren
12 years 5 months ago
I'm laying down lol I will
I'm laying down lol I will take it easy
Talk soon Jc love ~
Nordic cloud
12 years 5 months ago
The only thing, if it is a
The only thing, if it is a haiku,
it's language is difficult, the aim
of them is succinct simplicity,
a message easy to understand,
and usually with some kind of hint
at the season.
The last line could be,
a descending bird
or the wide landscape.
Which might help you see what I mean,
just saying what I felt Jayne,
Love to you Ann.