haiku (spring contest)

old man's last hurrah
in yellow fields of laughter-
fresh tulip snow-cones!

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Lake Simcoe Canada

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, E.B. Browning, Theodor Seuss Geisel,

Comments

Geezer

4 years ago

This makes...

me think of drinking dandelion wine from buttercups! Tulip snow-cones could be those frozen icy things you get from the ice cream man. Beautiful colors! ~ Geez.
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ROSYME

4 years ago

Thanks lovedly

It is not. I can't think of a word to put in L3 without disturbing the flow. I thought about it for a while now.

Thomas

Triskelion

4 years ago

Dandelion wine...I had a friend when I was young whose father made different wines. He gave me a dusty bottle of that for a date I was going on. I think if he had known how nice it came out, he might have given me something else, (but then you could never tell with him) Thanks for waking that memory and thanks for reading.

Thomas