Happiness ala virus kindness Judy edit

Happiness
like a virus
comes and goes
how it comes
and
where it goes
no one yet knows

Billions of dollars
down the drain go
as they all want to sow
the virus of happiness
plenty more to grow

But still scientists,
doctors
do not yet know
how come

cold cures in a week
with medicine
and in seven days
it goes
without.......

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

Comments

Rula

10 years 4 months ago

Hello Loved

is indeed like a virus. We can catch if we are satisfied with every little thing we have. Health, money, kids ...etc.
I believe we can be always happy if we want to.
I like your simile. Yet I see you've gone so far talking about flu (cold) virus. (IMO)
and do you really need the reversed syntax??

lovedly

10 years 4 months ago

if u r meaning

without
here it means outside
and without
it ...this is silent understood I thought!
(medicines)

alidzain

10 years 4 months ago

Hi loved

I loved the starting and the middle part of the poem but I'm not too sure about the ending until I read your poem's title. You're trying to say that happiness is like a big mystery. Am I right? Good one.

Alid

lovedly

10 years 4 months ago

each one for himself

a poet can't satisfy 7.5 billions
keep that in mind

alidzain

10 years 4 months ago

of course not

we are only human after all.

Alid

lovedly

10 years 4 months ago

yeah we r

or r we?
is a big question
dear Alid

judyanne

10 years 4 months ago

it seems unfinished loved

I understand you are comparing the two, but you haven't joined the concepts
You may need perhaps a single line after 'down the drain go', saying something like 'just as', then add a bit at the end to bring happiness and a virus into comparison

I like this
Love judy
xxx