The Happy Orphanage

Down at the orphanage it's celebration time
They're having a party, a real good time.
All the kiddies are frolicking gaily
As they get their cod liver oil daily
Queuing for the toilets to take their turn crapping
Listen to those metal doors all a-flapping.
They're as cheery as a snowman on the 1st of May,
As happy as a lonely bastard on Father's Day.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: London, Culture Capital of the World

Favorite Poets: Siegfried Sassoon, Wilfred Owen, Rupert Brooke, Chaucer, Shakespeare to name but a few. And VERY IMPORTANTLY: Erich Fried, a leftwing Austrian of Jewish ancestry who fled the Nazis and became a British citizen in 1949., And, other writers (non-poets mainly): Raymond Chandler, Irvine Welsh, Anthony Burgess, Graham Greene, Charles Bukowski, John le Carré, Anthony Horowitz, Mick Herron, Margaret Attwood, Edna O'Brian, Maeve Binchy., Writers who I find vastly over-rated: TS Eliot, Virgina Woolf, Sylvia Plath, Phil Larkin, E.A. Poe, A. Ginsburg, Longfellow, Gerald Manley Hopkins (actually I LOATHE Hopkins more than damson-dappled words can say).

Comments

Gracy

5 years 1 month ago

Oh my goodness, Edna! To

Oh my goodness, Edna! To think there are real orphanages like the one you so deftly describe in your poem. My mother gave us cod liver oil until some pills came on the market.
Your end rhymes are perfect, the content makes me want to cry and I have no nits. The last two verses say it all.
All the best, Gracy

Geezer

5 years 1 month ago

While I like...

the theme, your scansion stinks! In fact it's down-right shitty! LoL
But glad to see that you are still hanging out and writing. ~ Geez.
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Edna Sweetlove

5 years 1 month ago

I agree the scansion stinks...

...but it's still worth a giggle.
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Lavender

5 years 1 month ago

The Happy Orphanage

Hi, Edna,
Your poetry is addicting. You have such a unique style and you state so much. I agree - those last two lines are incredible, and are "pure Edna Sweetlove." Fitting title. Really like this one, even though it makes me sadly shudder.
Thank you,
L