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Healing Droplets

The pain is healing;
The love is flowing;
Once again between the kids and she;
The babies were born still not in whole;
But neither in the cold;
The pain is healing, healing, healing!

She watched them grow into the different stages;
Their precious minds trying to comprehend;
Of the life they experienced;
They needed the love and assurance of both parents;
But could not fathom why not?
It became a lot;
So they just closed up;
Into their world who cares a damn;
The pain is healing, healing, healing!

They chat yet not deep;
They smiled but not wholeheartedly;
The mother saw the emptiness in their eyes;
The distance so near yet so far;
To turn back the years and see them small once more;
To bond with them is what mothers are for;
To hug them tight and wipe away their tears;
To let them feel their mother’s strength;
The pain is healing, healing, healing!

As they grow older, they saw the world through the eyes of an adult;
Then they may have felt their mother’s struggle;
Then they may have felt how hard life is to juggle;
They took their education with much deliberation and;
Made their mother proud;
The pain is healing, healing, healing!

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Hi everyone, any comment to improve this poem or perspective is most appreciated.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: South Zone

Favorite Poets: Maya Angelou, Beau Taplin, Nelson Mandela, William Shakespeare, Lucy Maud Montgomery

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Comments

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 12 months ago

they are healing!!!

that is energy flowing in the right direction....the opposite energy ingrown goes bad and poisons every aspect of life. they are healing...and all is right with their world...

*hugs, Cat

C

c lynn brooks

2 years 12 months ago

3rd line her,maybe try she

3rd line her,maybe try she in there and see how that works. Poerful words the repetion works well with the word healing. Nice piece of work

Warrior Princess

Warrior Princess

2 years 12 months ago

Hi C Lynn Brooks I have

Hi C Lynn Brooks I have inserted the word she instead of her. Let me know if that is what you meant. Thank you for taking the time to read this piece, and for the compliment.

C

c lynn brooks

2 years 11 months ago

Candice

Beautiful, I think now the sentence is softer. Thank you for using my suggestion

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 12 months ago

Let me know

When you get your book finished and it’s available I’d like to purchase it. Keep up the good work and as always I stand in admiration of both your writing and you spirit.

Awesome job
Tim

Warrior Princess

Warrior Princess

2 years 12 months ago

Hi Tim, aww, will definitely

Hi Tim, aww, will definitely keep you in mind, and again thank you for the external support and always inspiring words. It goes a long way to propel me to push forward and improve my writing.

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 12 months ago

The healing process

From trauma is an uphill battle but you have captured the beauty of it in this poem. Great job.

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 11 months ago

Being a rhymer...

I will try hard not to impose my writing style on you. I will come back to this one in the near future. I see where it may be tightened up and the lines poked a bit. ~ Geezer.
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