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Alex Tanner
Alex Tanner
May 23, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
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05/24 Romance

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Helen

Oh! Let me touch that marble flesh
Luminescent in soft summer's light,
My fingers reach, caress the face
That once did launch a thousand ships.

I cannot breathe,
I gasp for air
As cat like eyes on mine affix;
In eons past men died for this
In times not come they will again.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Isle of Wight United Kingdom

Favorite Poets: Poe, Swinburn, Bob Dylan, Spike Milligan, Alfred Noyes, Kipling., Many Others.

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tyro

1 year 1 month ago

The first stanza is the

The first stanza is the introduction, the second stanza is the passion.
the first three lines of the second stanza, with the powerful image it presents gives full weight to the poem.

I cannot breathe,
I gasp for air
As cat like eyes on mine afix;

Alex Tanner

Alex Tanner

1 year 1 month ago

Hello T

Thank you for your assessment, it is appreciated. Alex

Geezer

Geezer

1 year 1 month ago

Yes...

In times that will not come again. Helen, I remember well. The lines: "I cannot breathe
. I gasp for air..."
The effect she had on me...
~ Geez.
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