Barbara Writes

Jul 06, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Hell

There reside many that live
In cold, dark, and dampness
Beneath the earth
Thus the eerie crawlers of the land

There’s a final domicile
Of countless departed
Asleep in amity
Thus the precious ones pending life

Hell is not to fear
A shared grave of folks
Where all are laid
Before the resurrection

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

Comments

Geezer

14 years ago

Not my...

idea of Hell, but what do I know? I think I got the gist of the poem, but you don't make it clear, I think maybe that you have confused Limbo and Hell, although not knowing which way you are going, could be Hell. ~ Gee

Barbara Writes

14 years ago

thanks Gee

i appreciate your comment and do under the confusion. I didn't want my idea of hell to be obvious in this poem.
but i did wanted to see how the reader would interpret it. therefore i see your interpretation is that of Limbo.
it not a right or wrong view just a view.

Barbara Writes

14 years ago

Chrys

thanks i appreciate you bringing this to my attention. i have edited it and hope it sound much better

loved

14 years ago

i always thought ...Hell was above sea level

and heaven below
your poem depicts it otherwise
why is it so????

Barbara Writes

14 years ago

hi

i have heard hell describe in different ways, but never that way

loved

14 years ago

thanks do read my latest poem

three ceees and 21 jun thanks

weirdelf

14 years ago

Dark and ambiguous, worse, contradictory.

You don't give reasons and the final stanza is a cop-out, based on religion.

I would like to here you talk of self-made hells in the real world without religious contations, which detract from it's real, human existential power.

Barbara Writes

14 years ago

thanks Jess

your comment is always welcome.give me a idea of your self made hell. then i will write one relating to me