Barbara Writes

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Hell

There reside many that live
In cold, dark, and dampness
Beneath the earth
Thus the eerie crawlers of the land

There’s a final domicile
Of countless departed
Asleep in amity
Thus the precious ones pending life

Hell is not to fear
A shared grave of folks
Where all are laid
Before the resurrection

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

Comments

Geezer

14 years 3 months ago

Not my...

idea of Hell, but what do I know? I think I got the gist of the poem, but you don't make it clear, I think maybe that you have confused Limbo and Hell, although not knowing which way you are going, could be Hell. ~ Gee

Barbara Writes

14 years 3 months ago

thanks Gee

i appreciate your comment and do under the confusion. I didn't want my idea of hell to be obvious in this poem.
but i did wanted to see how the reader would interpret it. therefore i see your interpretation is that of Limbo.
it not a right or wrong view just a view.

Barbara Writes

14 years 3 months ago

Chrys

thanks i appreciate you bringing this to my attention. i have edited it and hope it sound much better

loved

14 years 3 months ago

i always thought ...Hell was above sea level

and heaven below
your poem depicts it otherwise
why is it so????

Barbara Writes

14 years 3 months ago

hi

i have heard hell describe in different ways, but never that way

loved

14 years 3 months ago

thanks do read my latest poem

three ceees and 21 jun thanks

weirdelf

14 years 3 months ago

Dark and ambiguous, worse, contradictory.

You don't give reasons and the final stanza is a cop-out, based on religion.

I would like to here you talk of self-made hells in the real world without religious contations, which detract from it's real, human existential power.

Barbara Writes

14 years 3 months ago

thanks Jess

your comment is always welcome.give me a idea of your self made hell. then i will write one relating to me