Hell On Earth

too that was a dream. Unfortunately it's all there... A reality!!
It would be great if you can keep up the syllable count almost the same in each line. It gives a smoother read, even if it is free verse.
Let's see if others have another perception though.

But all in all I thought this is a powerful writing.

that Rula might be a bit more perceptive than I, but I didn't have any difficulty in reading this with some smoothness. I really liked the introduction of the part about it being a dream! I don't think I realized that it was a dream until you fell out of bed. The twist came as easily as the twist of an acrobat. ~ Gee

I might be wrong. I am happy if anyone proves me so. L was only suggesting keeping the same syllable count in each line whenever possible. That's all.

For some reason it seems each generation has its own set of barbarians. Hitler and the Japanese with the Holocost and rape of Nanking. The Soviets and their soulless gulags. And now we have barbarians who call themselves Islamists who are doing the same things....sigh

Now to the poem itself. In my opinion there are subjects which are better conveyed with a rough flow than a smooth one and this is such.......stan

I like the flow. Well written free verse.

I left a comment, but it seems gone. I think they're trying to phase me out.
Anyway I would have liked to see a more consistent meter (yes, free style uses "rhythm"), but the subject is intense and relevant.

don't stop now

I enjoyed the read. But I agree with Wes and Rula about the meter

.... start by counting the amount of feet you have in each verse
They don't have to be the same length, but the stanzas need to be the same pattern on the whole. A shorter verse here and there for effect is good, but generally a large mix will pull on the rhythm
you have verses as short as trimeter and as long as hexameter...

The use of dream, and the late reveal, was clever.
a powerful theme and subject ... now work some more on it to make it a powerful write
Love judy
xxx

fatigues on..canada more welcoming
to all it seems throughout history
refuted and refugee

war is hell....from the narrative non combatant
untrained with only intuitive survival in chaos
this is a good write of a dream
and emergence..
watching U Tube vids of all battles..
no one seems to really win
yet its a part of humanity
through and through

Thank You!

I tried to play with these two stanzas which I found the most rough. Hope you find the difference.

I begged for a sign from heavens
above to set my heart at ease
[only] to find a statue of
an angel with broken wings.

The pain stabbed at my soul,
denying the strength I need
I have become another
victim to a conqueror's greed.