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lovedly
lovedly
Apr 08, 2017 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Hello Mr Sleepless

old men sleep less or are sleepless

as they do less physical work
and
don't get tired
brain says
get up do some work

I often sleep for two evening hours
five to seven
go to bed at midnite plus minus
then at 2 am eyes wide open
I stare into the cob webbed ghostly
not ghastly ceiling

then something within me says
wake up man
the day has dawned
yes it's only 3 am
and I yawn
till actual dawn is born

then as the sun peeks
into my bedroom
I shut my eyes and sleep

Now I know sun is keeping vigil over me
then at 12 PM noon
have bed tea

another work-less day begins
my spouse only grins
not because she is happy
it's a senseless me

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

8 years 3 months ago

Welcome...

to the world of feeling useless, old and cranky! I'm not sure that I see anything wrong with the way that you have written this. Just wanted to let you know that you are not alone. ~ Gee.
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Sparrow

Sparrow

8 years 3 months ago

Loved

First time in all these years have you mentioned "her in doors"
So in the background a lady has guided you in life, does she feel glad that you sleep less?
Good to know more of you young Bard, this write though could do with a better spark to hold us as we read..
Take care and know we walk the same pathway,
Yours ian..

Sparrow

Sparrow

8 years 3 months ago

Loved

I may have to retire and leave the writing up to my family,
My Grand daughter "Purple-Hobbit" is writing again.
Or maybe I will use it as an excuse to write more ??
Not wanting to write this evening I am a little tired, but who knows what will happen in Auto ,
Take care young Bard, Yours as always, Ian..

alidzain

alidzain

8 years 3 months ago

loved

I'm still considered young to some people but I feel kinda old of late. That make sense to you? This is a good.write.Keep on writing.

Alid