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HER GLORIOUS CHAPTER
Jogging down the lane
I heard his juggling pain
Yet to figure this plan
I was lost on his arms
Why not try to mend these palms?
Myself,the drop I couldn't manifest
Bonds kept teeming in fret
But we want this one flesh
Yes,lay pliant on his glebe
Thoughts could press
Then,who will go with the pledge?
It was a mountain tale
My nib couldn't pay
I love him, how do I say?
It was an anxious tray
Glinted dimples,sliced across
Uncharted touches,smiles off course
It was an unceasing abode
I want your loin broad
Please my paramour
Try open up
Cos,I can't cover up
Your lips need those backups
I don't want make ups
But,try to take up
Am tired of regurgitating this feeling
I wish to let, but kept drilling
please stop dribbling
Am steady to care for a kiss
Not even a hug,I won't miss
Since that cry
I was lost to your page
I need to try
But please come to my aid
Oh! With you I will ply
These bird
Kept shredding like blade
For you,my nightmares turned
Indeed, these touch I burned
Am now love drunk
About This Poem
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Comments
Jackweb
3 years 1 month ago
"Cos" should be (because)!
It is obviously an aphetic form of because. But in poetry it seems informal. So, the best way is to write in full ( because) or ('cause) instead of abbreviating it like " cos". Such style distorts a written piece!
Luckscribe
3 years 1 month ago
Jackweb
Thanks so much
Mr joghe
3 years 1 month ago
Hello,
Hello,
I like the structure of the poem.
My observation is that you've deviated from the ryhme pattern in stanza 2 of the poem.
'Myself,the drop I couldn't manifest
Bonds kept teeming in fret
But we want this one flesh
Yes,lay pliant on his glebe
Thoughts could press'