February 2023 Challenge Stupid Cupid

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HEREFORD ART GALLERY

Peacock in rusty steel circles Knife angel cast with iron wings
Hereford Bull Iron glancing A winged mermaid with wings
A wooden owl with snipped vertical wings
Twins reading a book as siblings
The face misshapen in hiding The ostrich garden girl pecking
The flight of a girl skipping Bright red dragon webbed feet Walking the dead holding up lanterns
The Scottish thistle just spouting
The standing turning around looking Japanese warrior guarding
The man in the universe star gazing
The Sculpted head flower to spring
Peacock in rusty garden circles Knife angel cast with fairy wings
Hereford bull Iron Glancing A winged mermaid which sayings
A wooden owl with snipped vertical wing
Twins reading a book as siblings
The face misheard inn hedging
The ostrich gardening the4 grass pecking
The flight of a girl skipping
Bright red Dragon with fire fairy wings
Walking dead holding up lanterns
The Scottish thistle just spouting
The stag turning around and looking
Japanese warrior silver beading
The Man in the woods star gazing
The sculptured herald flowers spinning

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Ross on Why, Herefordshire

Comments

Geezer

2 years 4 months ago

Sorry Ziggy...

I don't see the connection between the poem and the title. The poem is supposed to reflect the subject suggested by the title.
I do enjoy the walk-through galleries, but this is not the time or title. ~ Geezer.
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Seren

2 years 4 months ago

Dear Ziggy

I loved walking through the gallery. Did you take notes as you wandered through or is this pure memory?

I think it could be make into more if it weren't a listing list. Wink!

Cheers Seren