Lavender

Aug 21, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Here's To You

When I am older
next twenty years,
and you are older, too,

we'll sit beneath
the slate blue sky,
and share a drink or two.

We'll toast to friends
who've sailed away
over the great divide,

and think about
the times ahead
just beyond the other side.

So sing sweet songs
to our living boons
who roam with us each day.

Sing sweeter songs
to unforgotten souls
who are never far away.

When I am gone
some thirty years,
and you shall follow soon,

we'll sit within
the bright vast sky,
raise our glasses to the moon.

Cheers to all
who crossed our paths
with whom we shared a smile.

Here's to all
who saw us through,
those who made it all worthwhile.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Salud! L

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser, Jim Harrison, Billy Collins, Paul Simon, Robert Frost. I like minimalist poetry, and poems reflecting on nature and Mother Earth.

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Comments

Ruby Lord

1 year 10 months ago

Lovely, I enjoyed the rhyme

Lovely, I enjoyed the rhyme scheme and the simplicty of your poem and the way it built and came together at the end. Ruby :) xx

Lavender

1 year 10 months ago

Hello, Ruby,

A little reflection on my life, and life in general.
Thank you for reading!
Lx

Geezer

1 year 10 months ago

tribute to life and one's living contribution to it.
Yes, we are all together in this world, let's live in it like we all belong.
I like the three line format, it makes for a sharp picture,
rather than long lines blending the whole thing into one big blur.
Nicely done! ~ Geez.
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Lavender

1 year 10 months ago

Hi, Geezer,

True, we are all in this together - which hopefully makes the hard parts a bit easier to take.
Thank you!
L

scribbler

1 year 10 months ago

hello

Unusual rhyme scheme which does a good job of avoiding a sing song effect. I also enjoyed the theme of how we can none of us avoid getting older. But I still fight against it lol

Lavender

1 year 10 months ago

Hi, Stan,

Sitting beneath a sunny sky, sharing a drink or two seems to make getting older a little less disagreeable.
Thank you!
L

RoseBlack

1 year 10 months ago

A beautiful

picture engraved in my mind. I can envision sitting with an old friend, a family member or significant other and reminiscing about life. Your poetry always seems to enfold your reader in what feels like a gentle hug. Always a pleasure to read!

Lavender

1 year 10 months ago

Hello, Carrie,

I am so touched - if you feel hugged from this, then it has accomplished my intent,
Thank you for reading!
Lx

Lavender

1 year 10 months ago

Hello, Mark,

I am grateful for dear friends!
Thank you for reading!
L

Clentin

1 year 10 months ago

Great reflection of our

Great reflection of our changing lives. Liked the rhyme and the total effect of the poem

Lavender

1 year 10 months ago

Hello, Clentin,

Friends of old, and old friends are precious.
Thank you for reading!
L

FinleyOrion

1 year 9 months ago

Wholesome and Hopeful

Hi Lavender! Can I just say that your work is absolutely lovely. And this particular poem is just…magical. Really. I don’t know how else to describe it except for that it was bittersweet nostalgia with an undertone of hope. Thank you for sharing! :)

Lavender

1 year 9 months ago

Hello, Finley,

You are so kind! Family and friends are everything. (And poetry is pretty wonderful, too!)
Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughtful comments!
L