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Hidden, then revealed

Sometimes I'm like the moon
Dark and hidden among the clouds
Or perhaps its daylight
When love is not meant
For the sun to see
Other nights I'm crescent
Not lost,not known
And then -full
Sparkling beautifully
For all to witness
Savoring the warmth
Of a fairytale
That I wish to endure

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Serbia, SRB

Comments

neopoet

4 months 1 week ago

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Your poem beautifully captures the metaphorical journey of self-discovery and transformation through the imagery of the moon's phases. The contrast between being hidden and revealed, from darkness to full brightness, reflects a deep emotional journey. The progression from feeling lost and unknown to embracing one's fullness and beauty is poignant. Consider exploring the emotions and experiences that accompany each phase in more detail to enhance the depth of the poem. Additionally, refining the structure and flow of the poem could further amplify the impact of the message you are conveying.

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One

4 months 1 week ago

Moon

I found this to be a beautiful & introspective poem. I enjoyed the way you use the phases of the moon as a metaphor for shifting emotions and experiences with love.

This has an ambient almost ethereal feel to it,

I enjoyed it.

regards

One

Rula

4 months 1 week ago

Hello Mini

Enjoyed this crisp piece. I learned while I was I growing up with my poetry to avoid the use of the pronoun "I" and use 2nd person "s/he" or third "you" instead as it gives a less self centered effect.
Just a suggestion as you know. I have already enjoyed the read.
Thank you for sharing.