Ian.T

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"Home"

I shall write in mornings glow,
would you walk with me there,
things I need to know.
if the world is the same,
for you as it is for me.

A lovely place for poets to be
They sometimes make me cry.
I have searched for many a day,
To stop those tears in my eyes.
I want to find a trace of your light,
It was not fair you know.

A trail gone cold in my sight
To walk that extra mile.
As I just wanted to be with you,
To see your beautiful smile.
To all that you know
Take care out there.

I will wait for you as all time will go,
In this place I call Home.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Waiting for some first words from our poets????

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Leicestershire, Ex Moonraker, GBR

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Comments

scribbler

11 years 2 months ago

Hi

There are poems which for some reason touch my heart. This is one such and it is aggravating that I can't tell you specifically Why..............stan

Ian.T

11 years 2 months ago

Thanks for your visit, yes this one is a mystery, it to me seems to indicate someone we love yet is at a distance where we will once again see them when we reach our inevitable Home, some of these are like auto writing and come from some place deep,
Yours Ian.T

raj

11 years 2 months ago

Ian

As Stan has commented before me, I too find this very touching and sentimental. Thanks for posting. I liked the rhyme and sequence.

Regards,

Ian.T

11 years 2 months ago

raj

A place to wait for those left behind when we journey on, thanks for your visit,
Take care out there, Yours Ian.T

loved

11 years 2 months ago

To walk that extra mile.

and add on a 's''' to make it smile
sentimental

as we reach or tend to reach the path breaking distant horizon
for newer foundations
in greater hope

Ian I see you still love
the past
do cling on it helps attaining salvation

loved

11 years 2 months ago

how is this Ian

Sentimental

Inspired by Ian
since posted in stream

Ian.T

11 years 2 months ago

Loved

Thanks for your two comments, and the new write,
Sort the new write post it on stream,
Keep the compliments on my poem,
Then everything will be a dream,
Yours Ian.T

loved

11 years 2 months ago

thanks for holding it

as this site has no means to hold drafts
one poetry 24 hours
I have removed the original
thanks Ians