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Lavender

Jun 10, 2020 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Home Renovation

Popped up
by the jolt
of the leg
of the oak chair,
the loose floorboard
snagged my shoe
and sent my bowl
soaring,
each Cheerio
swirling
milk blotches
onto ceiling,
walls, and
floor.

Hammer and nails
before fresh paint.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser, Jim Harrison, Billy Collins, Paul Simon, Robert Frost. I like minimalist poetry, and poems reflecting on nature and Mother Earth.

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Comments

Lavender

5 years 1 month ago

Hi, Teddy

I'm glad the imagery is suffice - when it happened, it was as if those swirling Cheerios were moving in slow motion and splattering everything!
Thank you, as always, for reading!
L

Lavender

5 years 1 month ago

Hello, Jerry

It's never as easy as it seems it should be.
Thank you!
L

Lavender

5 years 1 month ago

Popped up...

Hello, Mark,
I will work on this a bit since it is not clear. I was actually already standing and innocently tucked my chair in - then all the action started.
Thank you!
L

tyro

5 years 1 month ago

As I read this I thought why

As I read this I thought why is it not in the contest for a funny poem; when that bowl went flying I had to laugh.

Lavender

5 years 1 month ago

Cheerios

Hi, tyro,
It is funny looking back on it! The ordeal was over in a split second, but I found Cheerios days later...hiding.
Thank you for reading!
L

Geezer

5 years 1 month ago

I must have forgotten to, save my comment, because I know I did. I know all about the slow-motion thing, during an accident; I have had a few of them where I have watched it all happen as if in slow-mo. I especially enjoyed the Cheerios and milk soaring through the air to splat against the ceiling and floor. Was it an after-the accident maintenance?>Or the cause of it? ~ Geezer.
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Lavender

5 years 1 month ago

Hello, Geezer

I was going to paint first...had moved table and chairs away from the area while holding a full bowl of Cheerios in hand. It was going to be so simple...
Thank you!
L

Geezer

5 years 1 month ago

Yup...

always going to be a simple fix. I've said that dozens of times and wound up hours later, asking myself; WTF? How did I get into this mess? Nice job in sorting that out for me. LoL ~ Geez.
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c lynn brooks

5 years ago

lavendar

sounds like a murphy's law day ( if it can go wrong it will)
what a mess cheerios all over lol

Lavender

5 years ago

Hi, Chrys,

Quite the mess, indeed! And you are right about Murphy's Law, but it does add a little humor to poetry.
Thank you!
L