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Mar 11, 2025
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An Honest Voice
I possess
what Doug calls
an honest voice.
By itself
I express my Alto
presence in the room.
In a group of people,
a collective,
it merges with
the other voices.
It makes a huge
beautiful sound.
When I sing,
I breathe
in and out
up and down
and stretch
to reach the notes.
It brings me joy
to be part of
this wall of sound.
It creates.
It produces
a cultural output
of which
I am very proud.
This honest voice
will return
to rehearsal
next Tuesday
in anticipation
of another happy experience.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: When Doug spoke tonight at the AGM, he mentioned about "the honest voice", which clicked with me intuitively. I am one of fifty Altos in The Camberwell Chorale. This commitment is entirely voluntary on my part. It gives me joy and has significantly expanded my knowledge of music. It is another aspect of the manner in which I express myself.
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
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4 months ago
Neopoet AI - version 2.0
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "An Honest Voice" effectively captures the joy and pride the speaker feels in using their voice to create music within a group setting. The imagery of the voice merging with others to create a beautiful sound is vivid and impactful. The poem also conveys a sense of dedication and anticipation for future rehearsals.
To enhance the poem further, you may consider incorporating more sensory details to immerse the reader in the experience of singing and being part of a collective voice. Additionally, exploring the emotions and personal growth that come from participating in group singing could add depth to the poem.
Overall, the poem effectively conveys the speaker's passion for singing and the sense of community it brings. Expanding on the emotional journey and sensory aspects could further enrich the reader's experience.
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