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Anna Severchuk
Anna Severchuk
Nov 03, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
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Hope

Somewhere along the way, the system was broken,
Leaving hearts cold, and dreams unspoken.
Yet, in the darkness, a whisper starts,
A flicker of hope, that warms our hearts.
For though the path ahead seems bleak and dire,
There’s still a spark, a flickering fire.

We hope you can still hear us, God,
Because humanity is lost, in a sea of mud.
The air grew thick with sorrow’s sting,
A broken song, the echoes cling.
We search for light, in the shadows deep,
And vow to mend the wounds we keep.
For beauty still exists, though hidden now,
And hope for a better tomorrow, somehow.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Odessa,Ukraine, UKR

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

7 months 3 weeks ago

Dear Anna,

Hello! It has been awhile. It is nice to see you posting again! I hope all is well with you? my favorite lines of this poem are:

Somewhere along the way, the system was broken,
Leaving hearts cold, and dreams unspoken.
Yet, in the darkness, a whisper starts,
A flicker of hope, that warms our hearts.
For though the path ahead seems bleak and dire,
There’s still a spark, a flickering fire.

nice rhyming!
hugs, Cat

Anna Severchuk

Anna Severchuk

6 months 3 weeks ago

Thank you so much for your

Thank you so much for your kind words!
I am okay for now. But still my topics are a bit dark and not so optimistic as they should be.

It is interesting that actually I started writing with only these lines " For though the path ahead seems bleak and dire,
There’s still a spark, a flickering fire." and later it became a whole poem.

Geezer

Geezer

7 months 3 weeks ago

Yes...

there is still the spark, and hope does spring, eternal! Here's hoping that you are well and there will be an end to the strife soon. Nice to see that you can still imagine a good tomorrow. Nice rhyming. ~ Geez.
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Lavender

Lavender

7 months 3 weeks ago

Hope

Hello, Anna,
Always good to read your inspiring poetry. You express the hope we all search for in these dark times, and it is especially influential when coming from you. Best regards to you and yours, and your dear country.
Thank you,
L

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Tawny023

7 months 3 weeks ago

Lighthouse

I really enjoyed this hopeful and almost like a beacon of light through the darkness. Very inspirational and nicely done.